beat me down.

[Twistedmind]

Hi,

I'd like to know if someone could review my site. It is only the home page for the moment but i'll add the other pages in the same style so before i go on, i prefer to be sure i'm doing it right.

I'd like to hear about everything, from color schemes to picture layout and such. And if you can add some suggestions, (especially for blank areas, i have trouble with these), it'll be appreciated. Don't worry i'm a big boy and i won't cry even if you say this is pure s*** and it's not worth the time to review (i hope not but...).

This is my first site and i'd like to know if i do things correctly. Thanks.

http://testwww.adultbouncer.com/testsites/Fetish/43427/

Oh and i expect cbouch to write something since you really have an innate skill for this. :-)

[KathyD]

let me toss in my few pennies before cbouchar gets to it

-ok, you have a bit too much texture on your site, its really distracting. You could put it just in the background and still be good. (is it me or is the background texture slightly entrancing)
-scrap the texture behind the "join now" and leave it bare, it should contrast quite well with subtle texture of the red design you have next to it
-the center background texture also makes it harder to pay attention to the text

-how about putting the text about each movie next to the movie? The script you have at the top is really awesome, but a horny guy isn't going to scroll through the descriptions if there are only squished pictures to go with them.
-Also, you might want to break down the movie into scenes, give me a really good look into the movie, tease a bit.

-put some space in between your table for the movie pictures and the border, it makes it seem less cluttered
-I'd also like to see some more pics on each movie and let me go through the scenes later on too, you can do that on another page or maybe on your main so I can see more content, whichever you like, just remember to change your navigation to accommodate it

Grammar nazi time! I left out everything about awkward wording and just went for the things that really got to me.
"ezrebet welcome you--ezrebet welcomes you"
"fetish porn like you never saw it--fetish porn like you've never seen it"
"We have every kind of dirty fantasies--We have every kind of dirty fantasy"
from movie descriptions
"They take load of cum and huge dick--they take loads of cum and huge dicks"
"She is pierced, fucked, whipped, bondaged." This one is odd because bondage isn't a verb
"Blonde DO have more fun--Blondes DO have more fun"
always capitalize the word "I"
I could go on a rant on past participles but I'll have mercy on everyone this one time

[cbouchar]

I'm not the 'Reviewing Guy'. I do this only to be helpful and because I'm a jerk in real life. This gives me an avenue to critique people's work without getting punched.
So, all you folks looking for reviews of your galleries or new sites, go ahead and ask for reviews, but don't wait for me. Mine is not the only opinion that matters. The more eyes looking over your site and giving suggestions, the better.

Now, on to Erzebet Halls:


I read up on that crazy bitch. She was nuts and I can't imagine actually bathing in blood. While her actions were twisted (get it, Twisted!), I don't think they were sexual (from what I have read). Perhaps history has developed some folk stories about her being an ultra-horny sex-n-torture slut, but I don't think the facts really fit the image. Regardless, I suppose those who know her name will see some connection with hardcore euro-fetish stuff.
I hate the red criss-cross background. I do like the use of a subtle pattern in the background, but I don't like the one you're using here. For one thing, it isn't regular. It does't repeat across the page with an even distribution of lines. I also don't think it should be exactly the same red as the rest of the site.
I agree with Kathy regarding the cross-hatch background in the centre section. It is the background - so it should fade to the background, not be so bold that it jumps to the foreground making the text hard to read. Try the same patter with a 60% grey instead of white.
Your site is about Fetish stuff. You have fetish titles and fetish graphics, but all the advertising text in the header and the body are describing the 1000 other non-fetish titles and sites. That type of stuff should be only in the FAQ. You are selling crazy-ass fetish stuff, stick to that.
The pics in that scrolling section are squished. The images are horizontal aligned but are being compressed into portrait spaces. Either adjust the space alotted to the images, or crop them to fit. You are using them to sell your site - they must be just as hot as the other images on your site (like the header etc.).
I HIGHLY suggest that you not advertise your Vixeo site on your AB site. Focus on the AB site and don't put a GREEN BANNER on your grey and red site. There is a function available in the AB Webmaster lounge that allows you to have a popup for Vixeo. Rely on that but don't kill your site with a VX banner. On top of that, you are using the banner for webmasters, not for customers! Anyways, just take it out (my suggestion).
There's too much space between each title in the Preview section
In your preview section, you are squishing your images. Don't.
In that scrolling section, can you put the 'next' button outside the area? It's covering the text and it doesn't really match the design.
After looking at that thing longer (the scrolling section), I think you should modify it. You are using 50% of the space for text, which people don't need, and killing the pics that customers want to see. The code is really cool so I can understand you not wanting to get rid of it. Use it better though.
Nav bar - over 1/3 of the bar for the contact us button. You must REALLY want some emails to give that much space to such an unimportant feature. Perhaps you could put a 'Samples' button or something else that a prospective customer wants to see.That's all from me.

Good luck,

Cbouchar

[KathyD]

sorry, just being overly sarcastic, I was having a battle with a certain creative suite and some tables that has left a terrible taste in my mouth (auto-flattening, auto-resizing, th tag bullshit)

You give really good reviews and I just want to give you your props

[Twistedmind]

Of course i know, you are not the "review guy", everyone can write useful review (beside me lol). I'm really grateful to both of you since you wrote something. It's just that cbouch reviewed and answered much of my questions since I joined AB that's it.

I wasn't trying to say that all the others were poor reviewer (is it a word ?). the only bad review are those flaming our hard work. You wrote something and i'll take both opinion. Beside that, it's true i am looking for as much opinion as i can get, so...go ahead and write something even if kathyD and cbouch already wrote something :grin:

By the way, i am a french canadian so any grammar or spelling "lesson" can help.

Now, i'll explain some things.

There were some features in the begining that I left there "just in case" and most of 'em were bad idea (the vixeo banner, the scrolling section and the "contact us").

I think I'll ditch the whole scrolling thing and try to put that info somewhere else, anyway the "coding" wasn't that hard since it is the tutorial included with flash 8 :grin:.

There are two things I don't understand, the squishing in the preview section, and the "samples" button should I just add a contact us link in the bottom of the page ?

Oh and I think I'll go with kathyD suggestion, one page per movie, one section per scenes. (problem is some scenes have only 20-30 pics or so...and they aren't very...exciting)

One last thing, there is too much space between the preview tables, yes, but what should I add ? I was kind of running out of ideas.

That's pretty much everything, at least, most of the graphic design, in which I put many hours is good. To finish i'd like to say it's the first site I'll build in my whole life and my knowledge is extremely limited, so please don't put too much technical stuff.

With this, thanks a lot for you reviews,

Twistedmind

[AB-QA]

And I always appreciate anyone who takes the time to review a site for another webmaster.

QA

[Twistedmind]

Thanks for all,

Since it is you, cbouch, who wrote the part i don't understand, could you explain it a bit ? About squishing images in the preview section, what do you mean by that ?

Twistedmind

[AB-QA]

I think he means you are not using the natural size for the images.

Example

You have your movie thumbs set at width 172 and height 150 pixels so this would make the image look a little out of shape.

The natural size for 150 height is 182 width if that makes sense.

QA

[Twistedmind]

Ok, now i understand...

The bondage fuck dolls section isn't so bad but i admit the second one seem like if it is squished...thanks

[little_squirt]

If this is the first site you have ever done, I'd say you are off to an excellent start!!

My first sites were REALLY SHITTY...... LOL

For squishing images ... Look up "aspect ratio" and what it means. It will help you i think.